Passive voice in the clause

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I am writing my personal statement and came across a question that I can not find an answer for. I am not sure if this sentence is correct:

Despite the enormous 48 % annual increase in the amounts of medical
data generated, rarely gets it translated into approved
algorithms.

or this is better:

Despite the enormous 48 % annual increase in the amounts of generated medical
data, rarely gets it translated into approved
algorithms.

Also, I am not sure if it is evident that by it I am referring to medical data.
I hope my question is clear. Thank you.

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Hi, Welcome to SE! These questions are off topic for SE.Writing and I will have to vote to close it. To my knowledge, questions like this are supposed to be asked in English Language & Usage. That being said, I will answer your question as I'm sure it was written in good faith.
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It should say "it rarely gets" instead of "rarely gets it."
Neither of the choices you have put works because the passive voice refers to the increase in data, not the data itself. A better was to write it is:

"Despite its 48% annual increase in amount, generated medical data rarely gets translated into approved algorithms."

or

"Despite its 48% annual increase in amount, medical data that is generated  rarely gets translated into approved algorithms."

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